YANWA Utter Carnage RESULTS, PROMOS + SIGNUPS?
More Champions have been crowned heading towards our 1st PPV. this coming week we will have qualifying matches for the MITB and KOTR (Money in the Bank and King of the Ring). but now to the results.
MATCH 1 – WINNER Rated R John def. Xtreme Classic after a RRJ hit a Starship Pain on Xtreme Classic through a table. After the Match RRJ says that he is one step closer to winning the Extreme Title and that Poncho better watch his back or things could get ugly.
MATCH 2 – WINNER Ammo def. Dimitri Petrov after picking up brass kunckles and repeatedly punching Petrov until Petrov retaliated hit Ammo with a Trashcan which caused him to fall back on to the mat, as Petrov was climbing out of the ring to get a steel chair, Poncho runs out hits him with a sledgehammer and pushes him back into the ring. Ammo gets up and covers Petrov for the 1 2 3.
MATCH 3 – WINNER KJ Styles def. DoG after KJ hit a Poetry in Motion with the aid of a Steel Chair. DoG fell forward onto the chair and was out cold. KJ then climbed the ladder to grab the No.1 contenders contract that was hanging above the ring.
MATCH 4 – WINNER TWISTER def UltimateRKO & Slick after quite a thrilling match to become the YANWA Champ. TWISTER climbed the cell while RKO and Slick were fighting near the announcers table. Slick got RKO’d by UltimateRKO who was then about to climb the cell when he realised TWISTER was getting the crowd involved with chants etc. RKO climbed the cell only to be hit with a KillSwitch which broke the roof of the cell. the fans were in shock and thought that there was no way in hel that RKO could get up…BUT HE DID. and then caught TWISTER off guard with a vicious Spear, but TWISTER is a tough man and kicked out of the pin. Then both men traded blows until UltimateRKO went down a received a sickening punt which sealed the deal for TWISTER. after the match TWISTER cut a promo saying "There aint no Jabrony that can stop THE TWISTER from becoming a champ. Beware all future contenders there may be a killswitch calling your name. IF YA SMELL……..WHAT THE TWISTER IS COOKIN"
MATCH 5 – WINNER Doombringer def. The New Muta after a Chokeslam to New Muta. after the match D-Will comes to the ring and has a staredown with Doombringer, before a bit of a verbal fight between the two.
MATCH 6 – WINNER HBM def The Animal, Rated Rude and Sandman to become the House Champ. The Animal started in a rage, grabbing whatever household weapons he could. he picked up a lamp and charged at Sandman who dodged him a grabbed him a chucked him straight out of the ring and into the barricade/wall. Rated Rude went for HBM who had already picked up an ironing board and took a huge swing at Rated Rude who was KO’d. Both members of The Rude Animals were in no state to continue. Sandman grabbed a trashcan and was in for a bit of surprise as HBM had set up the ironing board and then delivered some Sweet Chin Music to Sandman who fell onto the ironing board. HBM pulled him off a covered him for the pin.
MATCH 7 – WINNER Stryder won an over the top rope battle royal to become the Million Dollar Champ. Shikhar Sachdev was the first man eliminated followed by Kofi, Fred, Inferno, Lazyboy it came down to Jesse Shotgun and Stryder but Stryder showed his class and delivered a stiff right hook sent Jesse stumbling back and over the rope.
MATCH 8 – WINNER Twisting Ponchos def. Rude Animals to become the Tag Team Champs. Poncho was pretty fresh as he didnt have a match but TWISTER was looking a bit battered from his match earlier in the evening. Rated Rude got KO’d and was unable to fight so Animal was forced to compete 2 on 1. poor fella lost the match in about 3 mins. TWISTER RKO’d him through a table and then Twisting Ponchos had a little fun with a Con-Chair-To. Poncho climbed the ladder to retrieve the belts.
PROMOS
SIGN UPS???
Name
Male/Female
Gimmick
Finisher
Signature Move
I’ll allocate u to a championship.
Jesse Shotgun Promo:What?! This is bullshit…Everybody knows if it was a one on one contest with me and Stryder I would be Million Dollar Champion….If the owners here at YANWA has any common sense they will give me another shot at the title….Cocked Locked and Ready to Blow.
What is the defining moment in No Way Out history + YWWA The Bash Results?
WQ: For the WQ I will pick BA on it, not by most thumbs up. BA is awarded to whoever has the same opinion as me. OR if you explain good enough why and are able to change my mind.
Match 1: Losing Team must break up Masked Nightmare and Deadman 4 Life vs The World Is Ours
A great start off for the night, which is exactly what these guys do. Put on an amazing start for every night. The match was back and forth for the most of it. Oddly enough both teams did not have their troubles which they were dealing with for the past couple of weeks. The match stealer was when Masked Nightmare gurilla pressed Deadman onto the outside on top of The World Is Ours. But they were not in the ring for the pin. After 10 minutes passed from the start of the match. Deadman 4 Life and The World Is Yours continued their hatred for each other with a brawl on the outside. Nightmare then did not pay attention unlike last time and he hit his signiture Chokeslam. But Y2J kicked out at 2! Nightmare was angry and then lost the advantage. Y2J took control for a minute and ended up throwing Nightmare into Deadman who just got up on the ring apron. This knocked Deadman back to the outside and gave Y2J the opportunity to lock in his Arm Trap Crossface making Nightmare tap out for a third time. As Deadman entered the ring both men were in shock. The crowd didn’t help the matter as they were singing “Nah nah nah nah, nah nah nah nah. Hey Hey Hey, Goodbye” But Nightmare extended his hand to his partner for a handshake and they shook hands. But at that moment Nightmare betrayed his ex-partner and gave him a chokeslam. He then walked out of the ring with his head held high.
Winners The World Is Ours
Match 2: Openweight Title Match Phenominal HBK vs Undisputed Jericho
A very good match. A funny match to say the least. In his second YWWA match HBK beat Jericho without breaking a sweat. But on this occasion Jericho had his A game. On his way to the ring he told his followers known as The Wav Of The Future to not come to the ring with him. And they did not. Jericho seemed to have HBK’s number. Jericho was a counter master managing to reverse several of HBK’s moves. But HBK gained advantag and hit all his signiture moves near the end. The nip up, body slam, and an elbow drop. He then tuned up the music getting ready for Sweet Chin. But Jericho dodged it and got out of the way. As the ref was down and out, Jesh The Ultimae Oppurtunitist came running to the ring with a steel chair. As HBK tried for Sweet Chin on Jesh, Jesh swung the chair into HBK’s foot nearly breaking his ankle. As HBK limped Jericho hit the Codebreaker. Another ref made his way to the ring and a new Openweight Champion was born.
Winner Undisputed Jericho New Openweight Champion
Match 3: Hardcore Match for the Hardcore Title Bio-Hazard vs Darth Hendrix vs Rock N Wrestling Connection vs Rob Van Dam
An entertaining match to say the least. In the early get go Darth was on the move to take out Hazard, but Rock N Wrestling had different intensions. He sent Darth through a table with a viscious piledriver in the opening minutes. After that tension was there between RVD and Rock N Wrestling. They traded constant punches. At one point they ended up rolling on top of each other brawling it out. But RVD found his way towards Darth. As they fought near the ramp RVD threw Darth off of the stage! RVD looked towards the ring, saw Hazard and Rock N Wrestling down, shrugged his shoulder and jumped off the ramp hitting a Five Star Frogsplash onto Darth. The crowd went wild. Hazard then pulled up Rock N Wrestling and attempted to hit a Bio-Bomb through a set up table. Byt Rock N Wrestling escaped and hit his Collision Explosion Connection to become the new Hardcore Champion. As the crowd boo’d he walked away with his title. And RVD looked above in pain while down below the stage, and the new champ spit right into RVD’s face!
Winner Rock N Wrestling Connection New Hardcore Champion
Match 4: Women’s Title Match Punk Is Champ vs 101%Strauts Faction
Arguably the best match of the night. Violince and hatred galore. It wasn’t a wrestling match it was nothing more than a viscious fight. They were crawling at each others neck for 10 straight minutes. They made their way everywhere from the ring, to the outside bashing each others heads into the announce table. It finally took their brawling on the outside to end the match in a double count out. But as the bell sounded they did not care. They still went at it. The refs made their way to the outside of the ring to once again break up their fight.
Winner DRAW
Match 5: Psycho Dude 99 vs Justin
A wipe out. This rivalry has been boiling since the YWWA debut. And it finally came to an end here. Psycho Dude enialated Justin. Busting him up with his bare fists Psycho Dude destroyed the man he convinced Headquaters to throw out of office. He eventually hit Justin with two consequtive Thunder From Down Under’s. It gained him a big
Winner Psycho Dude
Match 6: Tag Title Match The Beasts (aka Wave Of The Future) vs Stewie Griffin and Rated O for Obama
This showed what tag team action was all about. A classic match indeed. Back and forth for the entire match. The originals faced the future. Last week on Breakdown the future managed to win but this time it was anybodies game. After 25 minutes Obama hit the Barack O Bottom on MA, and Beast King was hit with the Stewie Splash. But, both Elite and Fabian Phenom made their way to the ring. Destracting the champs, Beast King rolled up Barack and gained The Wave Of The Future the tag team titles.
Winners The Beasts (aka Wave Of The Future) New Tag Champs
Main Event: World Title Match Graduation Bear vs Con Man
Not the best match, but a good way to end the show. Psycho Dude made his way to the ring in the middle of the match just to watch. Con Man gave him a slap across the face and as he turned around he was hit with The Grizzly Function for the win.
In my opinion the greatest moment in N.W.O history is well..all of it.
i mean No Way out has sooo much history in WWF it started as In Your House,not No Way Out,then it hosts so many historical matches,like
Steve Austin, Owen Hart, Cactus Jack, and Chainsaw Charlie vs. Triple H, Savio Vega, and the New Age Outlaws (Billy Gunn and Road Dogg) in a no disqualification match
Triple H (c) vs. Cactus Jack in a Hell in a Cell match for the WWF Championship
and many many more matches,especially when they had TWO Elimination Chambermatches in ONE night,and EDGE was the only man in history to compete in BOTH of them.
But if I had to choose one out of all of the great moments,It would have to be between when Eddie Gurrero won his first WWE championship agianst Brock Lesnar,or when The Rock and Hulk Hogan went ONE ON ONE.
P.S Great show,but im kinda gettin tired of nobody voting for me,im not getting angry,but thats why i wanted to not have voting,because i knew the same people would win week after week after week.
5/5 stars
fall from the nest … , bon voyage .. bon chance … c’est la vie … comme il faut?
king of microwave
forge ahead ahab kill the mighty white beast
and wander ishmael for a thousand years
ten thousand times to cut and strip the blubber
of the great white fish not knowing its vulnerability
fiddle and fumble as we do
who would ever expect we might succeed
and succeed so well that we kill off
that from which we live?
we will make no more microwaves
in the city of industry here
in these acres and acres of wheels and gears
from the throbbing and pounding
the great heart has seized
and a resounding silence has come
and i used to seek the night in its cool, crisp shadows
and now it seeks me with its burning heart
from celestial calm to a kind of human fever
i think now i cannot escape and wonder when the change came
and why?
what drove me from my stillness to this madness?
and i think it could have been a dream
what business have we made
to frighten so our souls?
i want to pretend the great metal presses
are really giant cookie cutters
they cut and print in chocolate and peanut butter
and i imagine i am not a part of all that i see
and only a silly dreamer
the clear cool night used to suckle me
in all the persons that I think I am
hidden deep within – singular voices cry out
I am your child I am your mother I am dad
and now the night hums like many factories
and because i have seen the forming machines
churning-out microwaves in the city of industry
i now see the thirty-ton press
driven by the broad belts
and the wheels and the bulbous off-center cam
that swings around and around driving the cutting blade
lending it its mighty momentum
the sheets of metal placed
and the great clutch engaged
the blade comes down, striking and forming
bending the steel to drive one crease
into some engineer’s blueprint
of the now common household appliance
the hum and roar the clank and hiss
hands scampering in and out like sea crabs
in and out as the blade rises and falls
in when the light turns green
out when the light turns red
and now an infrared beam stops the blade
if hands are slow or wrong
the times are mostly past of fingerless and armless men and women
in the world of microwave
this is a mutation and adaptation to the times
of the smoke stack industry to the realization
that this is bad for business
a simple rhythm gathered from a universe of forms
so simple for progress to be made
all geared-in as we are and so to speak
and wondering if it is our nature
that drives us on
and so one day when unfurled in my daily purpose
and wearing the uniform of industry
i pass the king of microwave
the real estate signs are up and the windows dark
weeds high around the once grand porticoes
the trades have descended like big birds
to feed upon the dead
not judging, merely supplanting
the signs saying ask for jack or nellie
boarded shut the jobs are gone
the air whistles through the naked boards
and the flash and thunder of the night is stilled
now and forever
i come to seek my self as i always do almost as a stranger
and i’m not so sure he speaks to me this time
he’s been heavily laid-upon this once-thought immortal one
and i learn it’s harder to go back
than to just plunge ahead, onward, farther
flowing down the stream
and somewhere amidst this cascading water course
i’m catapulting down along the pristine and demure mountainside
there is an icy-eyed one that’s leaping up
leaping and diving up and ever up
how can this be? this fish is marvelous
he obeys celestial law and swims a thousand miles
as if it were an inch because it’s all in the motivation
all in the commitment of the heart
we ask what natural purpose we are heir to
we say we explore the limits of the mind
we teach we move and climb with method
with skill and direction and i wonder
the rust and dust
the broken homes and handless men
and countless stories simply untold
don’t they scream a muted cry
if we listen once into the silence?
so what crime to say what future comes?
what violation to say we’ve come this way before?
what, a felony to say we have alone ourselves?
one broad and eternal moment that never changes?
what madness to gaze upon a clear, still night
to consider what the condition of my heart?
and yes, flattery will get you anywhere
It’s quite unique.
But it is hard to read in places also.
Nice:)
Can someone please look over my essay please!!! THANKS! Ill take any suggestions/revisions?
As most people spend their Saturday afternoons, I meticulously flipped through every channel on the TV until I landed on a particularly interesting channel. One afternoon I flipped to something I had never seen before. In the scene, the women wore wrapped headpieces and the men beat drums. The colors they wore seemed to glisten and gleam in the sun, and the patterns weaved neatly. Several men and women dance in a pattern as village people surround them. Onlookers clap, cheer, and chant. As I continued to watch I became entranced with their feet stomping up and down with dust clouds following them like a veil. The women swung colorful cloths around like a Spanish bull fighter to the beat of the drums. I later found out this was a traditional dance for the Haitian religion voodoo. Haitian voodoo is a religion that holds memory of Africa and Haiti’s past, worshiping spirits, and practices they perform.
The religion of voodoo, or more commonly vodou, has a vast culture and history. First, voodoo began in African kingdoms. After colonizing Africa, Europe quickly began shipping slaves to various parts of the world; including Haiti. As the slaves came together “the tribal beliefs and customs of all these groups would combine to form a new religion, voudou” (Turlington 4). The slaves were treated very poorly because slave owners did not want a community to form. Against their wishes and due to the flexibility of African culture, “religion was the unifying force of all slaves” (Turlington 19). Because of the slave trade and adaptability of tribal religions, the vodoun religion became created. Next, in Haiti the vodoun religion is practiced and mixed along with Roman Catholicism. The Catholic religion forced slaves to become baptized. With this forced religion slaves used it as a “tool to use to conceal their true religious practices” (Will 49). Eventually every major spirit became identified as a Catholic saint (Will 49). Finally, the rebellion and revolution began the widespread coverage of vodou. The slaves now had a reason to revolt; to preserve their religion. Haiti then won independence in 1903, when the French were forced out (Turlington 33). Today, nearly everyone practices some sort of voodoo in Haiti. With a very rich history and the prevalence of the Haitian people, Haiti is now an independent country that freely practices voodoo.
Spirits play a large role in Haitian voodoo; Vodouisants strongly believe spirits control the whole universe. To begin with, voodoo belief acknowledges that one god exists. This creator may be referred as Bondye. Bondye does not have human feelings, and represents fate. “Bondye is too great to become directly involved in the lives of his creations” (Will 16). Because Bondye cannot connect with people, he does so through Lwa. The Lwa “are immortal spirits with supernatural powers” (Heinl 690). Therefore, although the Bondye remains the creator of the universe, Lwa communicate with humans and represent different matters. Next, the Lwa control all aspects of life, and are everywhere. The Lwa represent different symbols, and thousands of them exist. People such as the famous and infamous can become Lwa after they die, and “famous figures in Haitian history are also transformed into Lwa and honored by followers of vodou” (Hintz 49). Finally, Possession plays a large part of the voodoo lifestyle. The only way to completely communicate with a Lwa “is through possession […] the Lwa temporarily displaces the soul of a person and takes over that person’s body” (Hintz 58). Possession gives the Lwa a voice and a body to warn the person, tell the future, and more. Also, through possession the Lwa can do whatever they wish to. Through Bondye, Iwa, and possession; the vodoun religion provides many answers to its followers.
The practice of voodoo all together contains many parts that relates to Catholicism. First, just like in many other religions, voodoo also has a place of worship with a spiritual leader. An appointed priest or priestesses must “open a temple, officiate at rituals, and lead a vodou community” (Turlington 153). Priests and priestesses take on a large role in the community and normally play the leader role. The priest or priestesses occupies many jobs such as: community leader, therapist, healer, fortune-teller, and more (Turlington 155). Vodouisants try to preserve their history and practice like their ancestors “preserving the role of the religious leader as the lynchpin of the community” (Turlington 154). There is no real need for a priest or priestesses, but people feel they must be present during a possession to better understand the Lwa’s needs. Continuing, in vodou those who practice are often part of a temple lead by a priest or priestess. A community “consists of all the people who attend rituals in his/her [priest/priestesses] temple” (Turlington 156). The community takes care of each other, and works under the guidance of their religious leader. Lastly, as many know the rituals done for the voodoo religion are elaborate, and very different. Rituals enable followers to communicate directly with the immoral spirits (Aboudja 1). In a typical ceremony drummers play and the people dance passionately to beckon good spirits to possess them. If there is an animal sacrifice, the throat of the animal is cut and put in a bowl for future use. Symbols play an important roll in rituals. Although the reasons why rituals take place vary, most ceremonies honor a Lwa. The community plays a large role in the religion voodoo, and the leader (priest or priestess) conducts many rituals that commemorate many different occasions.
Haitian voodoo is a religion that holds memory of Africa and Haiti’s past, worshiping spirits, and practices they perform. Voodoo originated from Africa when slaves brought along tribal traditions. The religion was combined with many catholic traditions, and today many choose to follow both faiths. The revolution and Independence of Haiti marked the start of a new beginning for voodoo. Vodouisants believe that the creator, Bondye, cannot be reached directly but through Lwa’s. Their major beliefs are that every part of your life is controlled by Lwa’s. Continuing, Possession by a Lwa is highly praised and allows for a better personal connection with spirits. In a community, the priest or priestesses has the most power, and plays many roles in society. A community is a group of people that follow the same priest or priestess, and therefore the same beliefs. In voodoo rituals, the people often eat meals together, dance, sing and listen to the beat of drums. Even though the United States and other places see vodou as a type of witchcraft, once you learn the history of voodoo and understand all aspects can you then fully see the beauty of this culture.
Works Cited
Aboudja, Houngan. “Haitian Vodou.” Vodou Spirit. 01 June 2005
<www.vodouspirit.com/haitian_vodou.html
Heini, Robert Debs and Nancy. Written in Blood. Boston: Houghton Mifflin Co., 1978
Hintz, Martin. Haiti. New York: Children’s Press, 1998
Turlington, Shannon R. The complete Idiot’s guide to: Voodoo. New York: Marie Butler-Knight, 2002
Will, Emily Wade. Haiti. San Diego, California: Lucent Books, 2001
Line by line adjustments would be fabulous!!!!!
but if you don’t have the time its fine.
thanks so much for the imput
It is pretty good, but there are several technical problems with your essay. Some of your phrasing is awkward a little. I could send you line by line adjustments if you wish. But that will take some time.
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Thoughts on the near future of the Cleveland Indians…?
I really think the Tribe needs to trade some of their AA and AAA players such as Trevor Crowe and go out and get a middle of the order hitter or a leadoff 2B-man such as Ian Kinsler. If the Indians could add Kinsler, that would seriously impact the lineup for the 2009 season.
LINEUP
1 – Ian Kinsler – 2B
2 – Asdrubal Cabrera – SS
3 – Grady Sizemore – CF
4 – Victor Martinez – C
5 – Ben Francisco – LF
6 – Travis Hafner – DH
7 – Matt LaPorta – 1B
8 – Shin-Soo Choo – RF
9 – Andy Marte – 3B
Notice I don’t have Jhonny Peralta or Ryan Garko in that lineup. I’m hoping they trade Peralta before the deadline and deal Garko in the offseason in order to acquire either bullpen help or a leadoff 2B-man.
Hot prospects on the Indians farm system include 3B-man Wes Hodges and 1B-man Beau Mills. These guys seem like they can swing the bat and possibly contribute in the next 1-2 years.
Kinsler would be tough to get, but guys like Dan Uggla, Orlando Hudson, etc. would be who I’d like.
Another idea would be to go after a player such as LF Juan Pierre as a leadoff man and move Ben Francisco to RF or DH if Hafner is in fact finished.
i dont think the rangers will get rid of kinsler any time soon.
National league vs American league?
after a few close all-star games and 2 of the last 3 world series going to the nl is it ‘coming the better league. All the trades have been big al players going to the nl. There are so many teams competing for first in there divison they will be battled tested into post season (not saying it isnt in the al). Besides world series and all-star games of the past and posssible future, is the national league becoming the btter league? 14 of the top 20 starters with best era are in nl and there are still rumors of roy halladay entering the nl and c lee (21 mlb best era). also 7 of the top 9 homerun leaders are in nl. and 11 of top 20 are nl players in avg. The cardinals are loading up and have heard possible trade rumors of troy glause due to injury who’s capable of swinging the bat but not throwing real well (so best case prospect and/or pitcher(s) intrade for glause to be dh)
also post season prediction??? 1 round guesses to ws???
Having the home field advantage for the AL is important. AL teams have a big slugger to plug into DH, like the Angels with Guerrero and the Red Sox with Ortiz. NL teams have a position player that will have to do the unfamiliar task of DHing. That is a bigger advantage than not having a DH and making your pitchers bat. So generally head to head, the AL has a theoretical advantage. But as you pointed out, the NL won in 2006 and 2008 and if you subtract out the Red Sox, the NL has won in 3 out of the last 4 non-Red Sox years. Why take out the Red Sox? I don’t know, I just like them.
How Does My Story Look?
Story- Follows main protagonists Berry Lewis, Daren Williams, Holly Appleby after graduating from the rank of Apprentice becoming a higher rank, Journeymen. It’s generally a long process to become a certified Mercer (merchant) and once they become one, they may start a business and become masters of their trade.
They leave their master, and traveling together for protection, they must buy and sell certain rare items, obtain a certain profit, and report back to their master with evidence once they completed their task to gain a new one, but he also has business himself sometimes and with clues they must navigate his location. They make companions and enemies along the way. They get vacations when they do a very satisfactory job.
However, it’s not as easy as it sounds. Hardship arises both on sea from pirates and overland from thieves, criminals, etc. And of course poor navigating at times, bad weather, lack of food, water, etc, war, being accused of being witch/wizards from superstitious towns people, dealing with consequences of making bad deals with leprechaun mafia, con artists, and even vengeful mermaids angered by pollution caused by humans. But sometimes the struggle can lead to a very rewarding outcome in the end…or not.
1) Does my story sound too childish? I’m 16, and don’t want it in that “Child Zone” or anything. This story was in fact to relate to college kids. Leaving home and trying to map out your future, taking a first step into adult world, meeting interesting people and being independent. Since the era is somewhat a spoof of medieval times, I thought that I’d incorporate some medieval folklore and superstitions like mermaids, leprechauns, etc. But not too much, I want a feel of reality also. So there’s no super human strength and crap like that.
2) Does my story sound interesting? Hopefully it doesn’t sound like any cliché coming of age garbage. My primary characters are no super heroes, have no prophecies, and don’t always do what’s right, but with time they learn from their mistakes, but sometimes not completely.
3) The thing which troubles me most is romance. How am I to go about this? I don’t want any adult situations between my characters, so since this is like the medieval era, I was going to make it the norm of society to wait for marriage rather than most college people now days to avoid adult situations. Also they aren’t allowed to marry during Journeymen stage, but can date. What do you think of this?
Also I was planning on Berry and Holly to have budding relationship over time, though not sure of the other’s feelings, aren’t sure how to act at times, which creates tension. I want it to be really slow developing though because I’m planning a long series. In what ways can I go about this? Also does their description below sound compatible?
Berry Lewis- 17 year old. He’s also black; different from your usual main protagonist. He’s a laid back, open minded, amusing type of character and loyal to friends. Doesn’t rely solely on strength to get things done, as he isn’t the strongest hot shot around. But he is a great leader. Nickname is "Bear" And always wears a special mistletoe necklace around his neck.
Holly Schmit- 17. Naturally, she is independent, possessive, compassionate, courageous, feisty, strong-willed, and a great fighter to boot- with only the occasional mood swing. Good ability to see the good in others
1. That? Childish? No, never!
2. I think it sounds VERY interesting. Great plot, great ideas, very interesting. I’d totally read the series! Ha, ha. Reserve me a copy, signed. Oh, and I bet the movie would be sweet, too. YES, IT WILL BE MADE INTO A MOVIE.
3. I’m not entirely sure about that, sorry. Their description does sound compatible in ways, but they might get a bit annoyed at each other at times. You could put that into the story, like, how they overcome it and deal with each other, etc etc.
Good job!
May I have your constructive thoughts on this please?
White Trash by The Highway
We live by a busy road and possess too many things
to be considered poor; there is the occasional would-be early bird
that we have to turn away. The knick knacks
upon the shelf you would probably consider tacky-
but they are emblems of a past fighting an over bearing future–
bronze praying hands and ceramic figurines sit like sculpted snapshots
of actions that have almost faded into obscurity.
We are too bitter to pray, and even grandmother is too busy
to rock in her chair and knit sweaters.
Hulls of metal frames perch our lawn like a museum display
because someday they will be,
they will be.
Tires can never be too many, mine is a swing that almost reaches the bay,
and I wouldn’t trade it for an amusement park.
Our home would fit on a road no doubt,
But you take the clay potted plants in the sill
as a request for you approval
And that is not why they are there.
I bet your lifestyle doesn‘t leave much room for imagination.
I like to flick the fan on high at night and open the window.
The traffic becomes a crashing sea
with a hint of a breeze.
Sometimes I’m in a café in France,
Other times, somewhere in India
when the air carries a certain spice.
This writing has some very interesting things to say and says them in mostly interesting ways. It has a few typos or omitted words. It starts out like it knows exactly where it is going but then, I think, loses its way and gets less focused.
I wouldn’t want to tamper with your poem, but if it were mine, I would do this:
proofread it for omissions and typos
omit lines 13 and 14
in line 16, change "But" to "Do"
add a ? at the end of 17
in line 18, omit "And"
omit line 19
in line 22 change "a hint of a" to "an onshore"
in line 25, change "when" to "If"
How about this Bulls-Clippers trade?
After the trade for Zack Randolph, the Clippers have one more really talented big man than the can use. Camby is a defensive beast and is averaging 9 and 9 with at least around 2 blocks a game in like 25 minutes. That’s great in that amount of minutes. Randolph has been averaging 20 plus and 12 a game which is beastly, and Kaman is a solid double double guy. To me, it seems like Kaman is the logical answer to be traded as he and Randolph kind of duplicate eachother. It’s been noted that the clippers really want to add a good wing player, I guess to back up Al Thornton. Here’s a trade I would like to see that would help both teams: http://games.espn.go.com/nba/features/tr…
Bulls: Yes, they lose two good bench players who help their team a lot, but given their depth, this shouldn’t do them in. On the other hand, the upside is too great. They finally get the true center they need who also has a low post game. With Kaman going to work in the middle, it would open up the inside outside game with Gordon, Deng, Hughes, Hinrich (when he comes back), and even Rose, who is showing increased jumpshooting. He would also creat quite a dynamic duo with Rose, and a potential big 3 with Deng added. Projected lineup: Rose, Gordon, Deng, Gooden, Kaman, with Hinrich (again, when he comes back), Hughes, Thomas, Noah, and Gray. That team would become immediate challengers in the east.
Clippers: They clear up the space they need to have Camby and Randolph dominate on the inside, and get two very valuable pieces to help the team. Nocioni is a straight hustle guy, he’s going to give you 110% when he’s on the floor and would fit in great as a 6th man to come in for Thornton, Randolph, or even Camby (then Randolph can slide to the center spot). He is deadly from 3 point range, a good defender, and a guy who will immediately be a fan favorite. His numbers would also improve because he would definitely get more playing time than he is in the crowded Chicago frontcourt. Sefalosha is a player of the future. He is a lockdown defender, can play the 2 or 3 (even the 1 or the 4 in a pinch), and is still very young. He has also shown flashes of an offensive game and with time and consistant minutes could be very productive on that end of the floor as well. His stats really don’t do him justice as he does a lot of the intangibles and doesn’t get as many minutes as he deserves. Both Noch and Sefalosha fit the bill for the exact player the Clips are looking for: a good swing man. Noch has the offense and the intensity and Sefalosha has the defense and the potential (just look at his PER, it’s well above what most guys his age with his playing time are rated.)
All in all, I think this trade would really benefit both teams. What do you think?
Here, the link didn’t seem to work for some reason- Hope this one does.
http://games.espn.go.com/nba/features/traderesult?players=2456~3028~1982&teams=12~12~4&te=&cash=
I like it. Both teams win and as a chicago fan I love that we finally get a legit center. Losing Noch and Sefalosha hurts, but you gotta do wut u gotta do.
How about this trade- Bulls/Clips?
After the trade for Zack Randolph, the Clippers have one more really talented big man than the can use. Camby is a defensive beast and is averaging 9 and 9 with at least around 2 blocks a game in like 25 minutes. That’s great in that amount of minutes. Randolph has been averaging 20 plus and 12 a game which is beastly, and Kaman is a solid double double guy. To me, it seems like Kaman is the logical answer to be traded as he and Randolph kind of duplicate eachother. It’s been noted that the clippers really want to add a good wing player, I guess to back up Al Thornton. Here’s a trade I would like to see that would help both teams: http://games.espn.go.com/nba/features/traderesult?players=2456~3028~1982&teams=12~12~4&te=&cash=
Bulls: Yes, they lose two good bench players who help their team a lot, but given their depth, this shouldn’t do them in. On the other hand, the upside is too great. They finally get the true center they need who also has a low post game. With Kaman going to work in the middle, it would open up the inside outside game with Gordon, Deng, Hughes, Hinrich (when he comes back), and even Rose, who is showing increased jumpshooting. He would also creat quite a dynamic duo with Rose, and a potential big 3 with Deng added. Projected lineup: Rose, Gordon, Deng, Gooden, Kaman, with Hinrich (again, when he comes back), Hughes, Thomas, Noah, and Gray. That team would become immediate challengers in the east.
Clippers: They clear up the space they need to have Camby and Randolph dominate on the inside, and get two very valuable pieces to help the team. Nocioni is a straight hustle guy, he’s going to give you 110% when he’s on the floor and would fit in great as a 6th man to come in for Thornton, Randolph, or even Camby (then Randolph can slide to the center spot). He is deadly from 3 point range, a good defender, and a guy who will immediately be a fan favorite. His numbers would also improve because he would definitely get more playing time than he is in the crowded Chicago frontcourt. Sefalosha is a player of the future. He is a lockdown defender, can play the 2 or 3 (even the 1 or the 4 in a pinch), and is still very young. He has also shown flashes of an offensive game and with time and consistant minutes could be very productive on that end of the floor as well. His stats really don’t do him justice as he does a lot of the intangibles and doesn’t get as many minutes as he deserves. Both Noch and Sefalosha fit the bill for the exact player the Clips are looking for: a good swing man. Noch has the offense and the intensity and Sefalosha has the defense and the potential (just look at his PER, it’s well above what most guys his age with his playing time are rated.)
All in all, I think this trade would really benefit both teams. What do you think?
Great trade. Helps both teams a lot.